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write a standard essay on the same topic: start with an introduction, develop well-written body paragraphs, and end with a conclusion. After you finish writing your essay, edit and proofread it paying attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling. 

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Instructions:

There are THREE sections in this exam paper:

1. You are required to answer ALL the sections.

1. In section 1, apply the learned skills for writing focus.

1. In section 2, answer some editing questions to edit spelling, words, punctuation, mechanics, grammar and sentences.

1. In section 3, fill in the given graphic organizer.

1. In section 4, write a standard essay on the same topic: start with an introduction, develop well-written body paragraphs, and end with a conclusion. After you finish writing your essay, edit and proofread it paying attention to grammar, punctuation, and spelling.

1. Cross out any notes you make which you do not want to be considered.

Outline the essay by filling in a graphic organizer (flow chart) below.

Marker’s Initials & SignatureEarned MarkMark allocated (per question)Question Number
15Section I: Writing Focus
5Section II: Editing
5Section III: Outlining the Main Ideas
25Section IV: Essay Writing
50Total in Figures

Tutor’s remarks on language and content:

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Section1Writing Focus20 POINTS

Read the essay below and answer the questions that follow:

To Go or Not to Go to College

Finishing high school then college and getting a decent job are a typical path for almost everyone. We have been programed from birth to follow the pathway laid out for us by our predecessors. However, the world is constantly changing. College is no longer the necessary step between your adolescent years and your future. There are some points that you should consider before you jump onto the college bandwagon.

First, it is absurdly expensive. The cost of college has skyrocketed in recent years. Attending a decently-ranked university can easily cost upwards of $100,000. What is even scarier: according to the Wall Street Journal, college graduates who take out loans leave with, on average, $27,000 in student debt. Most importantly, this is a debt that they cannot default on.

Second, you mistakenly think it will prepare you for career success. School teaches obedience and discipline. If you think about it, the most successful students are the ones who do their homework, and do it on time. Nevertheless, employers are looking for something that schools do not teach. They value people who are self-directed, can set goals, take initiative, and succeed at work not just in school.

Moreover, getting a degree does not guarantee getting a job. The New York Times calls recent college graduates “Generation Limbo.” More than 44% of college graduates under the age of 25 are either unemployed or underemployed, which means they are forced to take jobs that do not require a degree. Thus, if you have student debt, how are you going to pay it back if you are making little to no money? You need to realise that everyone else is doing it. Almost 15,000,000 students enrol as undergraduates each year. Going to college no longer distinguishes you from the crowd. Instead, a college education has become ubiquitous. Therefore, it will be hard to stand out.

Interestingly, you have not seriously explored any other options. In fact, it is what you “should” be doing, but not what you want to do. You have been told your entire life that college is the logical next step, but you do not actually have a reason as to why you are going. College does not excite you nearly as much as does going out into the real world. Attending a 4-year institution is far from the only path to take after high school, despite what your college counsellor (or parents, peers, and teachers) might tell you. In reality, you have a spectrum of options, from taking a gap year to entirely designing your own education.

Despite the way they are portrayed, normal people can and do succeed without going to college. Their stories are just not as widely publicized as are those of Bill Gates or Mark Zuckerberg. A tried-and-true route can be through getting an unpaid internship in a field you are interested in. Learn as much as you can, then leverage your experience and new network of professional contacts to get a paid internship. At that time, use that experience to get a full-time job. Remember, it is not a choice between attending college or working at McDonald’s.

Most people learn more outside of the classroom than inside of it. For some people, learning via textbook is tedious. They prefer learning by doing working, exploring, creating, or otherwise doing things in the real world. Others have no problem learning out of a textbook. Instead, it is the one-pace-fits-all atmosphere of school that bothers them. A classroom setting is optimal only for a small number of people. It may suit you or not. Therefore, try to figure out how you learn best.

Most importantly, there is an incredibly increasing amount of resources available for free. Almost any knowledge you could possibly hope to gain these days can be found on the internet. If not, you can get in touch with someone who has this knowledge or knows how to get it by using the Internet. “You wasted $150,000 on an education you could a got for a dollar 50 cents in late charges at the public library”, said Will Hunting.

To sum up, the previous points help in recognizing that college is not the only place where you can get more affordable and meaningful education. You can pay lots of money for the curriculum and social experience that college provides, and have it delivered on a silver platter, or you can do it yourself, creating an educational experience that you actually want to have for a fraction of the cost. The choice is yours, so weight up the effects of such a decision.

1. What is the subject/topic of this essay? (1 point)

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2. What is the writer’s main purpose? Choose the correct answer from a, b, or c. (1 point)

a. To inform and persuade

b. To compare and contrast

c. To describe a process

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3. Write the opening sentence of this essay that hooked the reader. (1 point)

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4. Which type of background is provided in the introductory paragraph? Choose the correct answer from a, b, or c. (1 point)

a. General to specific

b. Anecdote

c. Historical

5. What is the thesis statement of this essay? (1 point)

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6. What is the controlling idea of this thesis statement? (1 point)

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7. Write the main idea of each body paragraph in your own words. (7 points)

Body paragraphNo.Write the main idea of each body paragraph in a sentence using your own words (1 point each)
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8. Which statement in the concluding paragraph is a rewarding/restatement of the thesis? (1 point)

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9. What is the writer’s final/memorable comment? (1 point)

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Section2Editing5 POINTS

Read the following questions and choose the best answer from (a, b or c). (1 point each)

1. Which one of the following is the run-on sentence?

a. I politely got rid of the people at the door and went back to finish lunch.

b. I thought I would relax over my coffee, I had to break up a fight between my two young sons about which television channel to watch.

c. As a last bit of frustration, my daughter came downstairs and asked me to drive her over to a friend’s house before I went back to work.

2. Which of the following sentences is the most grammatically correct?

a. Early in life, Thomas Edison suffered with deafness he taught his wife-to-be Morse code while he was courting her.

b. Early in life, Thomas Edison suffered with deafness, so he taught his wife-to-be Morse code while he was courting her.

c. Early in life, Thomas Edison suffered with deafness and he taught his wife-to-be Morse code while he was courting her.

3. Which of the following sentences is grammatically correct?

a. They have relatives in Albania. Which is in southern Europe.

b. They have relatives. In Albania which is in southern Europe.

c. They have relatives in Albania, which is in southern Europe.

4. Which of the following sentences avoids unclear pronoun references?

a. They think that the ancient Egyptian secret of making mummies will never be discovered.

b. The archaeologists think that the ancient Egyptian secret of making mummies will never be discovered.

c. The archaeologists think that it will never be discovered.

5. Which of the following sentences avoids unclear pronoun references?

a. The historians say in the history books that Attila the Hun did not destroy Rome in A.D. 452, which may have resulted from a lack of food and military supplies.

b. They say in the history books that he did not destroy Rome in A.D. 452, which may have resulted from a lack of food and military supplies.

c. The historians say in the history books that Attila the Hun did not destroy it in A.D. 452, which may have resulted from a lack of food and military supplies.

6. Which of the following sentences is grammatically correct?

a. The company whose employees were honored is Apex Lamp.

b. The company which employees were honored is Apex Lamp.

c. The company who’s employees were honored is Apex Lamp.

7. Which of the following sentences has incorrect subject-verb agreement?

a. The peninsula of Korea, which stretches into the sea some 600 miles, lies south of Manchuria.

b. A nation that has been overrun by its larger and more powerful neighbors several times, Korea was split into two separate nations after the war of the early 1950s.

c. Since that time, South Korea’s economy, which follows the capitalistic model and enjoys the opportunities that come with free enterprise systems, have been growing steadily.

8. Which of the following sentences is grammatically correct?

a. In the hotel cocktail lounge, guests could find a piano and a jazz singer decorated in gold.

b. In the hotel cocktail lounge, guests could find decorated in gold a piano and a jazz singer.

c. In the hotel cocktail lounge, guests could find a piano decorated in gold and a jazz singer.

9. Which of the following sentences correctly uses commas?

a. As trade expanded across the Mediterranean world, Western Europeans were able to enjoy spices and other exotic products.

b. As trade expanded, across the Mediterranean world Western Europeans were able to enjoy spices and other exotic products.

c. As trade expanded across the Mediterranean world Western Europeans were able to enjoy spices, and other exotic products.

10. Which of the following sentences is the LEAST parallel in structure and, therefore, the least effective stylistically?

a. “Impressionism” is a term that applies primarily to an art movement of the late nineteenth century, but the music of some composers of the era is also considered impressionist.

b. “Impressionism,” a term that applies primarily to an art movement of the late nineteenth century, also applies to the music of some composers of the era.

c. The artistic movement known as “impressionism” can be applied to both art and music in the late nineteenth century.

a.

Section3Outlining5 POINTS

Outline the following topic by filling in the graphic organizer below.

Students internalize and synthesize information in different ways following different learning styles. Write a compare and contrast essay highlighting the similarities and differences in the way working students and non-working students learn. Discuss by giving detailed point-by-point explanation and examples of the similarities and differences.

Outline your essay here

Introductory Paragraph: (1 point)

Hook/Attention-getter statement: ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Thesis statement: ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Body Paragraph (1): (1 point)

Topic sentence (First Main Point):

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Major supporting details:

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Body Paragraph (2): (1 point)

Topic sentence (Second Main point):

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Major supporting details:

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Body Paragraph (3): (1 point)

Topic sentence (Third Main Point):

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Major supporting details:

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Concluding Paragraph: (1 point)

Reward/Restatement of the thesis:

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Memorable/Final comment:

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Section4Essay Writing25 POINTS

Write a five-paragraph essay (450-500 words) on the topic you have outlined in the previous section. (25 points)

Write your essay here

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Marking Rubric

The introductory paragraph should:· capture the reader’s attention· provide background knowledge· include a clear thesis statement stating what the body paragraphs describe (controlling idea and predictors)· have coherence, cohesion and unity· use appropriate grammar and mechanics3 points
Each body paragraph:1. describes one aspect of the topic1. begins with a topic sentence that develops one main idea1. has some major and minor supporting sentences that give more information about the topic sentence by explaining it with supporting details (facts, examples, experience/anecdote, and/or description)has a concluding sentence to close the paragraph9 points
All paragraphs should have coherence, cohesion and unity as follows:· use of proper order,· use of cohesive devices,· use of relevant sentences,· use of reference words, and· repetition of keywords.4 points
All paragraphs have been edited for grammar as follows:· it demonstrates control of basic grammar (e.g. tenses, verb forms, noun forms, prepositions, articles, etc.)· it shows sophistication of sentence structure with complex and compound sentences.4 points
All paragraphs have been edited for mechanics:1. it demonstrates good control over use of capital letters, periods, commas, semicolons and spelling1. it does not have fragments, comma splices, and/or run-on sentences2 points
The concluding paragraph should:· restate the thesis· summarizes the main points· uses concluding statements to signal the end of the essay (final comment)· have coherence, cohesion and unity· use appropriate grammar and mechanics3 points

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